straight and narrow
through a tunnel
bring the promise
joy of journeys
yet to come
hear the engines
feel the motion
taste the steam and
smell the smoke
at the platform
doors slide open
and OH NO!
Mum tripped over
in the hallway
all my tracks are
in a mess
cut her finger
on the tunnel
which lies broken
on the floor
time to pack up
tracks in boxes
play next door out
of Mum’s way
© Kristin Martin 2012
I love this poem because it is not like others where it rhymes, this poem doesn’t rhyme.
Thanks. I like writing poems that don’t rhyme, but this was fun with the repetition of the word ‘tracks’, and the rhythm is supposed to remind you of a train chugging on the tracks.
Most of your poems rhyme but this one doesn’t, that’s why I like it, because this poem stands out, plus, I like it because you came up with some amazing ideas for this poem!!!
Thanks! I’m glad you like my poem. I wrote this one a long time ago- when my kids were little and liked playing with trains. They are teenagers now!
That poem was really creative and super cool. You come with amazing ideas!
This poem rhymed so beautifully and it was amazing. I swear this could be turned into an amazing song. What inspired you to write this poem?
My kids’ train tracks.
I thought the poem was really funny, you come up with a lot of good ideas
I get the idea for this poem from my children when they were little.
Ha…ha..haa…..same things happens to me as well. But god save her and did not hurt my mam. Love it.
You did a lot of work on this I can tell. I really like how you wrote this poem and that the word “tracks” were in italics, well not really but it sounds awesome when you read this poem!
I do spend a lot of time writing and editing my poems.
You put in a lot of hard work into this. I love your poems.
I liked how you described the tracks by using all 5 senses.
I love your poem about tracks.
Hi Kristin ,
Ha ha very funny. How did you thoughts the names?
I wrote this poem when my kids were little. They loved going on train rides, and they also loved building train tracks on the floor.
How do you come up with all theese ideas?
I get ideas from my kids, my students, my pets, going for a walk. Everything I see is a potential poem!
I definitely encourage you to write poems. You can write your own versions of my poems if you like- that’s how we learn- by copying others and adding our own words. I am sure your teachers would like to read the poems you write.
I’m glad you think it’s funny, Ryan. It was inspired by my children’s train tracks all over the house when they were young.
Ryan says, ‘I like this poem because it’s funny.’